these days many families move abroad for work.some people believe that this benefits the children in these families. others beleive that it make their life more difficult.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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peoples
wants
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to
settled
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in
Forgien
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Foreign
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, There are lots of
benifits
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benefits
available for families, some of related to Education & Medical
servicies
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services
which is provided by
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the goverments
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goverments
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governments
government
in
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peoples
surviving
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there its really
deficults
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difficult
deficits
due to
cost
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the cost
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of living, weather,
athmosphear
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atmosphere
and communication gab.
lets
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let's
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discuss
about
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apply
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the
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both sight of
this
. Some of the
culture
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cultures
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are really
difficults
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difficult
to understand If we say
in
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apply
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abroad, parents give to
childrans
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children
children's
personal space
in
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at
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age
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the age
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of 18
year
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years
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old they can start working
in
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apply
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with during
the
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their
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study
,
However
in India
childrens
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children
children's
completed
there
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their
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study
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studies
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first
then
start working in
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a profssional
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profssional
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professional
way
also
they lived with there parents in old age
also
for take care them,
childrens
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children
children's
earns money in
abrode
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abroad
during
study
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the study
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is really helpful for pay there
expanses
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expenses
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and living. They
also
can pay college and hostel
fee
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fees
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from
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with
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this
money. In
abrode
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abroad
childrens
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children
get
the
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free
study
in university till the 12th class after that they got the chance a scholarship for
the
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further
study
,
Peolpe
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People
make sense they can do lots of activity during
study
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the study
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as of work in
restaurant
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a restaurant
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, Driving and social
worker
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work
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. In my opinion, Students get
the
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visa from
abrode
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abroad
country
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countries
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but they create little problems for them. Everyone
know
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knows
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that is
that
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apply
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not
eassy
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easy
to survive in
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a forgein
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forgein
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foreign
country
without
high
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a high
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earing
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earning
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,
professional
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a professional
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degree to get
the
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apply
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good work in
country
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a country
the country
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,
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it is
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realy
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really
difficults
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difficult
to survive there having some
leck
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lack
of strong communication skills
also
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and also
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more issues they can face In additional ther
enviremant
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environment
is totally
diffrant
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different
from
india
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India
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there we can face cold weather most of the months and
tempeture
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temperature
temperatures
can
be decrease
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be decreased
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-40 degree. In conclusion, There
is
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are
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the lots of
deficulities
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difficulties
we can find in
abrode
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abroad
also
we have some
benifites
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benefits
if we
seteled
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settled
over
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in
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the
forgien
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foreign
country
. But
Indian
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Indians
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can face everything they
always
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are always
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strong
compair
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compared
to another
country
people.
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