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Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about their country, while other people think it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen on yv and the Internet.

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Are you really familiar with your
country
?
According to
 some, native residents have a complete understanding of their nation without ever travelling abroad.
On the other hand
, some people argue that taking an international trip would provide them with a unique perspective on their own
country
. The latter is my opinion.
In contrast
, citizens have been immersed in the same cultural circumstance for a long time, having been born and raised in their motherland. It is obvious that they possess and master a great deal of knowledge about their own lifestyle, but they lack the ability to perceive the details of daily life and
therefore
 seem ignorant about them. During an interview, accomplished Italian director Bertolucci, who directed The
Last
 Emperor, an epic film about China, stated that being Italian gave him a new perspective on Chinese culture. As well, taking an oversea journey may allow you to gain a new perspective on your homeland. It is possible to polish and enrich your ideas about your homeland by listening to the comments of other nationalities about your
country
 or your cultural background, comparing your economic system with that of the state to which you are travelling, and observing the political and social events taking place simultaneously in your
country
.
Additionally
, an exotic experience helps you understand the nuance of your unique cultural identity. A world voyage offers a lot of opportunities to learn about native culture and history, which are the bases of citizenship identity. Despite acknowledging our past and present, do not stay in your home forever. People may debate whether a world trip is expensive, but a spiritual expedition to learn and discover yourself is priceless.
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