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Some say that university students should pay the full cost of their studies because higher education only benefits the students not the society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#say #university #students #cost #studies #education #society
It is believed
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some
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that students in universities ought to pay
their
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studies’
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 expenditures because
society
 will not utilize their education. I mostly disagree with
this
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high
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 educated individuals give
service
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society
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 in
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 variety of areas
such
 as governments and schools and they do some
researches
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 to improve
technologies
 which may be beneficial for
society
.
Firstly
, many graduates from
university
 take a role in governments and public services. In favour of
to be
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 beneficial for
public
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the public
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, they are examined by authorities and experts after their
graduations
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graduation
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 and they are assigned many places to
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 citizens.
For instance
, medical doctors, teachers and attorneys assume
key
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role
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 in public
service
. Their efforts for solving issues and improving education are
considerably
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 precious
for
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 people.
Thus
, students’ cost of studies should be paid by
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the governments
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governments
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government
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.
Secondly
, some
university
 students are realizing
researches
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research
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 in universities in order to find and develop national
technologies
. These innovations can ease
workloads
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 of people and they can allocate more
times
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 to themselves.
Additionally
, some inventions are implemented in public locations
such
 as free transportation. Apart from these examples, these
technologies
 are
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 in many fields for national security. Graduate scientists have advanced new weapons and security systems for possible threats. In short, these are counted as
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why
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society
 benefits from
university
 graduates’ studies. In conclusion, causes and examples can be multiplied with
this
 suggestion. Even though
,
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primary
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 benefits of these studies are impacted
university
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by university
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 graduates, in my opinion, societies utilize them in many areas
such
 as public
service
 and
technologies
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technology
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.
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