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The graph below gives information about the U.S. government spending on research between 1980 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the U.S. government spending on research between 1980 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the allocation of the U.S. government for research in different fields from 1980 to 2008. In general, the health subject spent the most
while
 general science research cost the least fund.
Moreover
, only spending on other fields decreased over
this
 period. Looking at the graph for more detail, in 1980, the U.S. government spent about 8
billion
dollars
 on the health field, which was the highest expenditure of the year.
However
, there was an insignificant decline in the next 4 years, after that,
this
 figure rapidly increased to reach about 18
billion
dollars
 in 2008. The expenditure on general science in 1980 was the lowest number (2.5
billion
). The U.S. government allocated an increased amount of money for 20 years after and maintained at 5
billion
dollars
 from 2000 to 2008.
Otherwise
, the fund for space research was 6
billion
dollars
, in comparison with 5
billion
 for the energy field. After 28 years, these figures for space and energy rose to approximately 10
billion
 and 8
billion
dollars
 respectively.
In contrast
, the expenditure for other fields witnessed a decrease from 7
billion
dollars
 in 1980 to around 5
billion
dollars
 in spite of recovery during
this
 period.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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