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Nowadays more and more people want to get things done instantly. Why is it? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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There is an irresistible urge for modern-day
people
 to accomplish
things
 quickly. There are a couple of motives why
this
 is, whilst there seems to be one major culprit behind
this
 trend, I personally believe that it is a change for the worse. The principal cause of the need to do
things
 fast is a change in
people
's perception of
time
. Technology has speeded up everything, and
people
 came to realize that they need to keep pace with it if they want to remain competitive.
For instance
, if workers in a tech company specializing in game development do not accomplish their tasks in a timely fashion or even if they do but fail to meet the deadline,
then
 it means financial loss worthy of hundreds of thousands of dollars for their company. The same holds true for media staff, sportspeople and other walks of life. If they fail to do their tasks during a regular workday, or even more sometimes,
then
 they are unable to develop a competitive edge over their counterparts. Whilst finishing
things
 in no
time
 seems to stand individuals in good stead by allowing them to win
time
 to do more, I would argue that it is a negative development anyway. First of all, the quality of work suffers. I cannot imagine doctors carrying out their operations in a quick manner or teachers delivering the maximum number of classes possible for the sake of finishing their jobs faster. Even more seriously,
people
 are putting themselves at risk of developing health issues, ranging from anxiety to stress to heart disease.
This
 is because constant
time
 pressure involves dealing with more problems, meetings, annoying
people
 and other work and life-related issues, which tend to bring about the afflictions stated above. The major reason that can explain the motive why
people
 have the desire to do
things
 at a fast pace is a shift in the perception of
time
, and in my view, it is an unfavourable development
due to
 the poor quality of work and health problems it can cause
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instant gratification
  • rapid advancement
  • instant communication
  • online shopping
  • fast food delivery
  • social media platforms
  • immediate feedback
  • recognition and validation
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • convenience
  • decreased patience
  • delayed gratification
  • realistic expectations
  • work ethic
  • unrealistic expectations
  • stress
  • dissatisfaction
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