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Many students have trouble being able to focus on school studies, with their attention span increasingly deteriorating. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

#students #trouble #focus #school #studies #attention #span
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In recent years it has
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rapidly increased entertaining stuff for
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distract
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 pupils from lessons at
school
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smartphones
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internet
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,
computer
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 games.
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 parents don't allocate their
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 it leads to poor performance at
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modern pupils have
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numerous devices like laptops and
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adolescents
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the adolescents
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 carry their
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children
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watching
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viral videos on their
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 a lot of their
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 there are
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 amount of
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play
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 computer games. Teachers and parents definitely should take firm
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 to find
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 schools shouldn't allow
children
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 to bring
smartphones
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at
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school
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 parents should limit
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the screentime
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screentime
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screen time
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 of their offspring.
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adults
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themselves
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 more
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 with their kids. Spending
time
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helping with
hometasks
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home tasks
some tasks
to
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children
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 part
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shaping of their success at
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 it is well-established that
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 up in
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 environment are more likely
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. In conclusion, as can be
seen
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 a lot of pupils have a problem with centre their attention on
study
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due to
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existence
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the existence
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 of modern entertaining devices like phones and computers.
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 with joint efforts adults can find the way out.
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