Many students have trouble being able to focus on school studies, with their attention span increasingly deteriorating. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

In recent years it has
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rapidly increased entertaining stuff for
children
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pupils from lessons at
school
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as
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and computer
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games.
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parents don't allocate their
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it leads to poor performance at
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I will explore
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issue and provide solutions to solve
this
problem. First and foremost literally all
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modern pupils have
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numerous devices like laptops and
smartphones
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of
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adolescents
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carry their
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everywhere even in
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children
waste
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watching
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viral videos on their
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a lot of their
time
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there are
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amount of
children
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computer games. Teachers and parents definitely should take firm
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to find
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schools shouldn't allow
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school
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parents should limit
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of their offspring.
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most
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adults
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due to
lack of free
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don't dedicate
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themselves
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more
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with their kids. Spending
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helping with
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home tasks
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children
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part
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shaping of their success at
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it is well-established that
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up in
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environment are more likely
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a lot of pupils have a problem with centre their attention on
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due to
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of modern entertaining devices like phones and computers.
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with joint efforts adults can find the way out.
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