IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

Having a lot of international sports events may promote world peace.To what extent do you agree ar disagree?

#sports #events #world #peace #ar
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The majority of
people
Use synonyms
 believe that
events
Use synonyms
 like
World
Use synonyms
Cup
Use synonyms
 will bring
peace
Use synonyms
 to the
world
Use synonyms
while
Linking Words
 some think that
this
Linking Words
 is a myth and that
world
Use synonyms
peace
Use synonyms
 is not related to
world
Use synonyms
 championships. I strongly agree with the notion
due to
Linking Words
 creating strong boundaries between different cultures and sharing lung the same interests. A number of
people
Use synonyms
 believe that
people
Use synonyms
 can have better social boundaries by having
events
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
 as
World
Use synonyms
Cup
Use synonyms
. In another
world
Use synonyms
, when gathering in the same place for something like
World
Use synonyms
Cup
Use synonyms
 they trying communicate with each other so creating many different relationships with other
people
Use synonyms
 from foreign countries . 2023
World
Use synonyms
Cup
Use synonyms
for example
Linking Words
 when a lot of
people
Use synonyms
 came to Qatar it was a good opportunity to create new friendships with other
people
Use synonyms
 from different countries. In ,addition to making a stronger social ,boundary I do believe that big
sports
Use synonyms
events
Use synonyms
 can bring
this
Linking Words
 opportunity for
people
Use synonyms
 to communicate with each other I believe these
events
Use synonyms
 mitigate the impacts of race in the
world
Use synonyms
. In
sports
Use synonyms
 ,champion
people
Use synonyms
 feel that are equal to others so it
this
Linking Words
 easier for them to connect with other
people
Use synonyms
. Some may claim that big
sports
Use synonyms
events
Use synonyms
 do not have any effect on
world
Use synonyms
peace
Use synonyms
 and big
sports
Use synonyms
events
Use synonyms
 are just a show to fill
people
Use synonyms
's leisure time and
world
Use synonyms
peace
Use synonyms
 is made by other activities,
this
Linking Words
 view is just not be overlooked because these big
events
Use synonyms
 are a new way of communicating between different cultures. In conclusion, a number of
people
Use synonyms
 and I strongly believe that big
sports
Use synonyms
events
Use synonyms
 bring
peace
Use synonyms
 to the
world
Use synonyms
while
Linking Words
 some may claim
this
Linking Words
 is just a myth.
Submitted by mahdiniknejad on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: