In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sport or doing execercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

#countries #people #fitness #trainer #sport #execercise #classes #development

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

A great deal of

Change the quantifier

A lot of

Many

Plenty of

show examples

people

are

Change the verb form

show examples

starting to get personal fitness

Use synonyms

trainer

Fix the agreement mistake

trainers

show examples

instead

Linking Words

of doing

classes

Use synonyms

or playing

sport

Fix the agreement mistake

sports

show examples

. there are several

reasons

Use synonyms

for

this

Linking Words

happening and it is a

possitive

Correct your spelling

positive

development all of which will be

dicussed

Correct your spelling

discussed

this

Linking Words

essay. There are a few possible

reasons

Use synonyms

for people choosing

this

Linking Words

way of

execercising

Correct your spelling

exercising

. First of all, playing

sport

Fix the agreement mistake

sports

show examples

or taking

classes

Use synonyms

may require socialising or interacting with strangers in order to make it in a team which most people prefer not to do. By hiring a

Remove the redundancy

apply

show examples

trainer

Use synonyms

Linking Words

however

Add the comma(s)

,however

show examples

, it is only the client and the

trainer

Use synonyms

so it will not be a problem.

Second,

Linking Words

having a personal tutor has much more

time

Use synonyms

flexibility compared to doing

classes

Use synonyms

since the

trainer

Use synonyms

is only there to train you and you only.

Overall

Linking Words

, I believe

this

Linking Words

is a positive development

while

Linking Words

every individual gets to be trained and instructed in a way that he or she prefers

Change preposition

apply

show examples

and get the anticipated result without any extra

actvities

Correct your spelling

activities

that you did

nor

Correct your spelling

not

show examples

want to like socialising or having to work at a team.

Also

Linking Words

, the

time

Use synonyms

will be fixed in a way that

Correct pronoun usage

apply

show examples

fits into your schedule so you do not have to quit something in

oreder

Correct your spelling

order

to be able to do

thiw

Correct your spelling

this

which is what happens when you take

classes

Use synonyms

. It simply goes with your lifestyle and work schedule and saves you

time

Use synonyms

and energy. In conclusion,

reasons

Use synonyms

like the

time

Use synonyms

flexibilty

Correct your spelling

flexibility

and not having to work

others

Change preposition

with others

show examples

are the possible

reasons

Use synonyms

for hiring personal trainers getting popular and

thus

Linking Words

, these are exactly why

this

Linking Words

has a positive outcome for everyone.

Submitted by mehrafarin084 on Sat Mar 11 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

8
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

271 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

8
band
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
The question of the most pressing environmental concern has sparked debate, with some asserting that the extinction of specific species is the primary issue, while others argue that broader ecological problems should take precedence. This essay will examine both perspectives and provide a concluding opinion.
4.5
band
These days, more and more people move away from the area where they were born and brought up when they become adults. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Recently, there is a phenomenon where people are leaving the place which they were born. This situation have its own advantages and disadvantages. In this essay, I believe that there are more advantages than the disadvantages in which I will discuss in this following paragraphs.
7.5
band
Some people think that developing countries need financial help form international organization. Others think that its is practical aid and advice that is needed. Discuss these views and give your own opinion.
While certain individuals opine that financial subsidies diverted from international organizations are utterly important for the countries that are currently undergoing development, people with opposing views claim that deriving supervision and sharing of know-how is what is needed by those countries. It is my contention that freshly emerging economies predominantly rely on the financial aid mechanisms that furnish them with concessional loans and donations to uphold their current growth rate, whereas, practice support can also be derived through the acquired financial resources.
7
band
In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
Recently, the owners of businesses have gone to the media and claimed having produced something that has never been seen before.This essay will explore the reasons behind this type of advertising and mention in detail how it is a negative development.
7
band
In some countries, it is possible to buy a wide variety of foods, which have been transported from all over the world. Do the benefits of this development outweigh its drawbacks?
Nowadays, it has been quite common that citizens in some countries can buy a wide range of foods transported from all over the world in their daily life, due to the advance of economy and transportation. In my view, this phenomenon has more positive effects.

In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sport or doing execercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

These days, more and more people move away from the area where they were born and brought up when they become adults. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people think that developing countries need financial help form international organization. Others think that its is practical aid and advice that is needed. Discuss these views and give your own opinion.

In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In some countries, it is possible to buy a wide variety of foods, which have been transported from all over the world. Do the benefits of this development outweigh its drawbacks?