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some people think that , prisoners should be made to do the communuity work instead of put them behind the bars. what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #prisoners #communuity #work #bars
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It is thought by
some
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that, culprits should do
the
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community
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 work, without payment rather than sitting in the bars. I completely
agree
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this
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 statement. In the following
essay
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i
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 will explain some reasons with examples.
Firstly
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, cleaning the
community
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 will help them to change their
behavior
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behaviour
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.
For example
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, if the person
ready
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is ready
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 to do work,
then
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 he
understand
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 and
realize
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 the
harwork
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artwork
hard work
 behind it. And
also
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 government should pass some rules to
prisioners
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prisoners
 like how much area
you
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they
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 will cover to clean, if you clean more area,
then
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 the prison time will
be reduce
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.
Moreover
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,
this
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 kind of activity will help keep the
community
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 clean and tidy.
On the other hand
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, it helps them to reduce the crime rate. If the person walks around the
community
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while
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 doing work, everyone has got to know the person, who did
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the crimes
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crimes
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crime
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. And people will be aware of him whenever they saw in public places. And when the prisoner saw his family and relatives, he felt ashamed and probably never did
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this crimes
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this crime
these crimes
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 again.
Furthermore
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,
this
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 type of
activitiy
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activity
 may help them to stay away from bars and keep more conscious
in
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about
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 their health. Because these culprits
are
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spend their time in
the
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bars. Drinking alcohol leads to cancer and other serious health issues. In
india
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India
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, some prisoners
caught
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were caught
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i
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I
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,
some
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and some
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 crimes
such
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 as bank robberies ,
snatching
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and snatching
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, had
alloted
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allowed
allotted
allocated
by
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apply
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some works as
a
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punishment
such
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 as cleaning the surroundings, roads ,parks, and beaches in summer. In conclusion, doing
community
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works
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work
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by
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with
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prisioners
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prisoners
 is the best thing . It helps to clean the
community
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, decrease the crime rate, change their behaviour and make them healthy.
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