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TOPIC: Nowadays, some people like to give help to the local community or provide people with direct help. Other people prefer to give money to national and international organizations. Discuss both methods and give your own opinion on which is better.

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Nowadays, charities supply the foundation of many organizations and give help to needy
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. There is debate on providing
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 with direct help or donating it to national and international establishments. I completely agree with the latter statement as
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 covers a large group of
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 and help the whole community to reconstruct.  Direct helping indigent individuals is a fundamental charity
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 a financial help providing their livelihood. innumerable
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 do not have a well-paid career or banking support from others and their livelihood is coming from other sources or donations.
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 trend makes human beings lazy and dependent,
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 they do not try to improve their circumstances.
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, Fetrieh, a type of
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that is
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 donated to needy
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 of Ramadan month of Muslims, is a well-known charitable budget, that provides food and clothes for them, but it is not enough for them and temporarily fix their problem.
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,
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 type of charity is not sufficient and only solves the problem temporarily.
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, substantial budgets donated to international establishments help them to invest in many fields of society that are important and available for a large group of
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 motivates individuals to use their efforts to prosper and make
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as well as
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 improve their economic situation.
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, payment of a large amount of
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 by paying
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 in a bank account for using the
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 to erect a pediatric hospital can provide a medical centre to treat children.
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, Many children of different social groups can give medical care from
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 charity.
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,
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 spent by international organizations and established for erecting social services has more effect on society.
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