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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficulty. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the present age, education is very important for the poor
as well as
 the rich. Some people believed that getting a university education is hard for both classes. I disagree with
this
 idea and in
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Firstly
, a university education costs very high tuition fees. The poor do not have enough to register themselves for the study.
For example
, The poor will not be able to register for the study which is available only in a university and has a high fee.
Therefore
, people with no money do not have any other options to choose from than free courses.
Additionally
, free courses are not up to the quality of private college courses.
Secondly
, If people with no money managed to get admission to a private college they do not have enough cash to maintain the lifestyle of other students.
For example
, the rich can afford all the luxuries
while
 studying
whereas
 the same is not the case with the deprived.
Therefore
, they feel a lack of self-confidence and they consider themselves of low value.
On the other hand
, a wealthy community may not have a good option to choose from locally available institutes. The institutes which are good are in other states or countries.
Therefore
, they might have to travel a few thousand kilometres to get into a good institute and have to live alone there.
Additionally
, they may suffer from depression and anxiety. In Conclusion, It is a common belief that deprived and wealthy folks find the difficulty in getting a good higher study.
Although
, getting good academic knowledge is difficult for wealthy folks but I believe it is harder for the deprived community.
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