the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
the two maps illustrate how the
road
ran through a
city
hospital between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen in the maps, the
city
hospital underwent a considerable transformation over the given period. In 2007, a
city
hospital had many empty lands and no facilities sufficiently.
However
, there had three main roads, a ring
road
which was on the north side of a
city
hospital, it had emerged with hospital
road
and a
city
road
.
Moreover
, there had a
bus
stop nearby a hospital
road
and
also
a car park for officers and the public close to the
bus
stop on the right-hand side of the hospital
road
. By 2010, the south of the
city
hospital, there had been developed substantially and a ring
road
has been connected with the hospital
road
by roundabouts the
bus
station was constructed in the southeast of the
city
hospital which replaced a
bus
stop.
Additionally
, a public car park was built on the northeast side,
while
the staff car park remained in the same place as in the year 2007.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, bus with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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