Write about the following topic. information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when travelling. etc.). Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Modern
technology
has now changed the world. The world has come so close that you can do anything sitting
at
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any corner of the world in the blink of an eye. I totally agree with the statement that it has its own advantages but in
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long-term
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we have to face
their
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cons, too. Discussing
about
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the advantages of
the
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information
technology
.
People
can do their work in their homes,
while
travelling, and doing any other activity. They don't need to dress up properly, travel to their offices, and go through traffic issues that are growing day by day.
This
can really
helps
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reducing
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traffic
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the traffic
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problem
that is
causing harm to the
enviroment
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environment
and resulting in global warming.
For example
, during
COVID-19
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the COVID-19
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pandemic online teaching, shopping,
working
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and working
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from home helped
alot
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a lot
to overcome
this
problem because the main reason behind it was social contact. So, through
internet
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the internet
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and by the use of
this
technology
businesses of many
people
don't stop.
On the other hand
,
this
technology
also
has its disadvantages.
Firstly
,
people
will start to have
sedentary
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lifestyle and would love to work in their comfort zone
that
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will badly
effect
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their health.
Secondly
, the
people
will have a very small social circle and they will not like to meet
people
and spend time with them
that is
a good form of activity and it releases stress. That's the reason
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generation Z have more depression ,stress, and mental health issues. To
concule
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conclude
, in my
opinion
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modern
technology
has its pros but in a long
run
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it will badly
effect
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affect
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the lives of
the
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people
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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