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Some schools prefer to teach specialised subjects to students after the age of 15, while others suggest that all the subjects should be taught throughout school life. What are the benefits of these 2 approaches? Which one is better, in your opinion?

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It is often argued that
students
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 should choose the
subjects
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 that they like to
study
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 to be more satisfied,
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 they should
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 all the
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 to have more job opportunities in the future. I support that
students
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 should select their own
subjects
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 to achieve more.
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 essay will analyse the advantages of both ideas. It has been suggested that young people should follow their passion for their school
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 and, choose the
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 that they prefer to
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.
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, many teenagers prefer literary materials to scientific
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 and, when they
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 they will be more motivated because they will feel it is fun,
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, they will achieve and, succeed more
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 to that,
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' grades may increase in
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 way and, parents will be comfortable that their children are studying.
On the other hand
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, some hard school
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 are really fundamental
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 as math and, admission may not choose
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 subject to
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,
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, it will assist them in their future life and, many jobs required math skills.
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, job opportunities will be hard to approach. In conclusion, I believe that young people should choose what they want to
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 in order to achieve,
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, some
students
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 take advantage of studying all the
subjects
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 to seek a better job.
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