The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon
The diagram illustrates the life cycle of salmon. It is a type of large fish belonging to the animal family.
Overall
, it can be seen that there are three major stages in the series. Two stages are observed in freshwater while
the last
step occurred in freshwater. In addition
, three different sizes are perceived in the cycle.
First of all, adult fish lay eggs on land full of small pebbles. They are found under the slow-moving upper river and reeds. Eggs spend approximately 5 to 6 months in the birth stage. Moreover
, after hatching they convert into fry that is
3 to 8 cm long. Fry spend 4 years in fast flowing lower river.
After that, the fry transforms into a smolt with a length of 12 to 15 cm. Smoky lives the rest of their life in the open sea for 5 years. Lastly
, smolt grows to adult salmon and continued its life period throughout the upper river.Submitted by anishakumarileemani on
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