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Some people think it is not necessary for adults to receive education in class self-study is a good way for them to study more effectively. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #adults #education #class #self-study #study
According to
 some peoples' current debate about how
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 it is for adults to be educated by studying own-by-own than attending university classes. I personally agree with the opinion of individual study, because of
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 of learning than visiting the educational places. To start with, it is a practical fact that people at teenage age know what to learn for sure. Since, they have other daily duties, like keeping the work and life balance,
spending
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 time with a family, -studying must save their time,
money
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and money
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 and
also
 must be used at their
work place
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 practically.  Seemingly, studying
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independently
 is one of the good options for every
learners
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.It does not require you to do extra paper tasks or to attend
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various classes, as you have to do it if you join
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offline lessons at the educational development
centers
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.
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 you can be perfectly educated by focusing on one basic direction
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 to doing a lot at the same time.
However
,
on the other hand
, to
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receive
 education in classes matter for people who did not do well
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 high and middle schools.By doing so, students will be given great educational backgrounds to decide their future careers.
To conclude
, apparently, there is no specific way of learning. As
this
 is optional for everyone
according to
 their way of learning and interests.
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