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You recently bought an electric gadget for your home. Your friend wants the same gadget and needs your advice. In this letter you should include: What the gadget is What you think about it Advice about other alternatives your friend could buy

#gadget #home #friend #advice #alternatives
Dear Mary, Hope
this
 letter finds you in radiant health and best spirits. It's great to hear from you that you've decided to upgrade LCD in your bedroom, and I'm writing to give you a piece of advice regarding my new one. Let first fully describe it for you, it's a silver 54-inch LG Smart HD with 2 sound outputs on both sides.
Additionally
, it's provided with a remote control which looks like a wireless mouse in order to facilitate moving from one icon to another.
Finally
, not only would it enjoy
such
 trendy features, but
also
 LG offers a 2-year guarantee for manufacturing flaws. If you want my opinion regarding
this
 device, definitely would I tell you that I was disappointed after it had arrived to me since
although
 it provides
such
 magnificent facilities, it still lacks the swiftness of response. Sometimes I have been struggling for hours for a web page to download.
Secondly
, after only a few days of trial, the remote started malfunctioning I guess
this
 is
due to
 the poor quality of the materials.
Therefore
, I strongly recommend that you purchase the 2023 version of
this
 TV since these problems above have been resolved.
Otherwise
, you could shift to another company
such
 as Samsung as their LCD screens have proved their good reputation in the market. Hope
this
 has helped, and if you ever come around, just drop me a line. Lots of love, Laila
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