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Government should make more efforts to promote alternative sources of energy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#government #efforts #alternative #sources #energy
These days we use
alternative
energy
 more than ever. So some people think that
alternative
sources
not
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 that important ,
while
 others believe that
alternative
sources
matters
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.
This
 essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion.
In
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one
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 hand, some
alternative
sources
 of
energy
doesn't
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 help enough so way we bother ourselves to take the hard way.
For example
,
the
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solar
energy
it
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 so expensive and take a big space to be useful
also
 it doesn't have
alot
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a lot
 of
energy
. So that's why some think that
alternative
sources
not
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are not
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 a pleasant idea.
On the other hand
,
alternative
sources
 are the best way to reduce pollution. To illustrate, if we use solar
energy
instead
 of gas for
the
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cars we won't hurt the environment with the combustion of motors fuels
pollutes
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 the air.
This
 proves clearly that
alternative
sources
 have
much
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 benefits than cons. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both point
views
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, I believe that governments are responsible
of
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 the environment so they must do more effort to promote
alternative
sources
 of
energy
.
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