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Government should make more efforts to promote alternative sources of energy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#government #efforts #alternative #sources #energy
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These days we use
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energy
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 more than ever. So some people think that
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 others believe that
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 hand, some
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 help enough so way we bother ourselves to take the hard way.
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solar
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 so expensive and take a big space to be useful
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 it doesn't have
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 a pleasant idea.
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,
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 are the best way to reduce pollution. To illustrate, if we use solar
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 of gas for
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cars we won't hurt the environment with the combustion of motors fuels
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 the air.
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 proves clearly that
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 benefits than cons. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both point
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, I believe that governments are responsible
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 the environment so they must do more effort to promote
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