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Despite warnings from various experts, there is still a tendency in big cities to build huge blocks of flats, which are seen as a quick solution to the problem of finding enough housing for people. Write a for and against essay in which you express your opinion about this issue.

In recent years there has been a vast increase in the number of people who move to big cities because of the study, work and of course accommodation opportunities.
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 it's a common trend to build huge
blocks
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 of
flats
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, it may lead to a harmful effect.
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,
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 kind of building is unreliable. The majority of
blocks
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flats
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 are built of poor quality.
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 means that it costs little money to build
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 housing. In consequence, the building is built improperly. What is more, another shortcoming is that there are too many people living in
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 type of accommodation. Nobody knows each other well and it raises suspicion.
On the other hand
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 kind of building has a number of advantages. The greatest benefit is that it is convenient for citizens to buy an apartment quickly and for little money.
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 leads to the solution to the housing problem so that everyone can live in cosy habitations. Another benefit is that it is cheap and quick to build
blocks
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 of
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 for construction companies.
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, they can satisfy residents and profit from it.  In conclusion, I believe that the advantages of building huge
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 are usually temporary in nature. The drawbacks of
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 kind of building can lead to negative consequences which are an influence on people.
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, the government should encourage companies to build high-quality condominiums so that it would bring more merits.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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