All over the world, the number of overweight people is growing. What do you feel are the main causes of this ? What are the effect ?

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In today's technologically sophisticated world, obesity of populations is one of the most concerned issues. Eating high-calorie diets, junk

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, and more convenience to

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dietary

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are the essential causes.

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, increasing the prevalence of metabolic syndrome which causes cardiovascular diseases and diabetes is the direct result of overweight ailments. Eating high-calorie

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prepares a main source of carbohydrates and unhealthy fats derivative for the body. The main sources of these ingredients are fast

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and junk

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which are available in many restaurants.

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, the prices are more pocket-friendly because they are fast-made and have cheap ingredients.

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, a survey showed that paying $10 per day can provide the required daily calories for an average person.

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, these foods are more convenient to all youth and adults with a low price and enough calories to satisfy their needs.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

141 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Overweight
Obesity
Sedentary lifestyle
Nutritional education
Aggressive marketing
Screen time
Economic factors
Genetic predisposition
Chronic illnesses
Heart disease
Diabetes
Hypertension
Psychological issues
Low self-esteem
Healthcare systems
Productivity
Stigmatization
Discrimination
Portion sizes
Convenience food

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All over the world, the number of overweight people is growing. What do you feel are the main causes of this ? What are the effect ?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In many countries, more and more women have full-time jobs as men. There is a logic that they should share the housework equally with men. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The best way to solve the traffic and transportation problem is to encourage people to live in cities rather than suburbs or countryside. What are the effects of rapid population growth in the city? How can the quality of life city dwellers be maintain?

Global warming is one of the various climate issues. Discuss the possible causes ad offer measures to control the damage caused.

In some countries, private cars are now banned from certain city centers. What are the advantages of such a system and do you feel that this is something that most cities should adopt?