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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#countries #people #products #world #development
One of the most controversial issues around the
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world
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 is trade.and traders try to introduce their product to other
countries
.these days
diffrents
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different
kind
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kinds
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 of
product
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products
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 from all over the world are available
every
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in every
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 corner of the earth.
According to
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 I am going to demonstrate how
this
 phenomenon can have
positive
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 effect. It is well-established fact that communication and trade between
countries
 have numerous
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positive
impact
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 on every nation.
Beacuse
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Because
,
firt
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first
 of all,all people around the world have access to all products and can use them without travel to other
countries
 to find the
prouduct
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product
.
For example
,Italy is
famouse
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famous
 because of its leather and my cousin
who
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apply
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spend
many
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 money
for
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on
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 her shoes and she always
ordere
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ordered
orders
order
 her shoes online from one famous brand in
italy
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 without difficulty and the company usually
send
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it
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them
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 after 2 weeks.It is not only beneficial for every
bussinesses
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businesses
business
 but only it is easy for
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the customer
a customer
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customer
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customers
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 to have access to every
products
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product
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 around the world.
On the other hand
,many
countries
have
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do have
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 not appropriate infrastructures or
some
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apply
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important materials to produce all goods that they need for their life.
For instance
,banana grows in
tropical
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the tropical
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 zone and it is not easy to cultivate banana in cold and wet weather.One
further
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positive
 point during the pandemic of
corona virus
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coronavirus
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 was related to vaccination.
Vaccine
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Vaccines
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discovered
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are discovered
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 in developed counties
such
 as
USA
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the USA
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 and they send
it
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them
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 to other deprived
countries
 to help other people
as well as
they
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apply
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gain benefits.
To sum up
,communication has
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no
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border
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borders
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 and
advancement
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advancements
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 in technology and transportation help people and
countries
 to have contact and attain numerous
benefit
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benefits
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 to sell or buy each other
produds
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products
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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