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In some countries，it is now possible for people to buy products made in other countries. To what extent do the benefits of this development outweigh the problems?

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With global development, It is true that buying
products
 from other
countries
 has become easier for people. I consider
this
 development has brought more merits ,
although
 some risks and problems are meanwhile unavoidable. Export and import business has had a positive impact on both personal life and company progress. As we all know , different
countries
 and cultures have different skills and techniques for producing goods. Having the possibility to buy
products
 from different
countries
 means that consumers have a chance to buy several diverse and high-quality goods they may have never seen or can not buy in their
countries
.
This
 will give people a high level of life and enrich their experience.
For instance
, jeans from Japan or America are actually more comfortable and more fashionable than those from China.
Besides
, the trend of economic globalisation has placed
companies
 in great competition. They have to make great efforts to innovate more attractive goods constantly in order to catch the consumer’s hearts and preferences, which will force
companies
 to develop forward and contribute to the technology innovation.
However
,
this
 change
also
 has some disadvantages to some extent. Ordinary people have to pay more for imported food、clothes or digital
products
 for their high transportation costs and tax, which leads to a heavy life burden . Looking from the perspective of local
companies
 of a country, their customers may be rubbed off by other international competitors because some high-income consumers tend to believe that imported
products
 may have higher quality.
Thus
, national
companies
 are facing risks in many
countries
. In conclusion,
while
 some problems, positive impacts generally overweight the negative side when it comes to the trend of buying
products
 from other
countries
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international trade
  • cultural exchange
  • economic growth
  • local industries
  • global economies
  • carbon footprint
  • quality standards
  • competitive pricing
  • consumer choice
  • importing goods
  • foreign products
  • economic integration
  • environmental impact
  • developing nations
  • market competition
  • globalization
  • trade barriers
  • tariffs
  • supply chain
  • sustainability
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