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The chart below shows the gross domestic product of four different countries in 2005 and 2010.

The chart below shows the gross domestic product of four different countries in 2005 and 2010.
The pie charts illustrate five major social
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 network usage in Britain in 2010 and their predicted estimations for the year 2018.
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, Facebook seems to be the all-time popular network to connect people in Britain and it is predicted to spread its usage significantly in 2018. Meanwhile, all the other social
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 sites tend to decrease their popularity by 2018, and especially Bebo is predicted to get disappeared from existence in 2018. Facebook is by far the most popular
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 to connect society in Britain, making 46.15% of social
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 users in 2010. By the year 2018, it is estimated to grow its percentage up to 72.46% Which is a significant growth for its consumers. The rest of the social networks comprising more than
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half the percentage is predicted to reduce their popularity to slightly over 1/4 of their consumers and Bebo having 8.17% of their customers seems to stop using totally by 2018. Twitter, Pinterest and Google Plus are going to shrink their use compared to 2010 by approximately around 1%, 3% and 5% respectively in 2018.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words media with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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