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The graphs below show the development of the cutting tools made by stone, one was made 1.4 million years ago, and the other was made 800 thousand years ago, viewing from back view, front view and side view. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the development of the cutting tools made by stone, one was made 1.4 million years ago, and the other was made 800 thousand years ago, viewing from back view, front view and side view. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pictures illustrate the changes in stony cutting implements between 1.4
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years
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 ago and 800 thousand
years
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 ago. As shown in the graphs, the back, front and side views can be clearly seen.
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, it is apparent that the size of
this
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tool
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 became smaller and turned drop-shaped,
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 it was formerly oval-shaped. Manufactured 1.4
million
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years
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 ago, the previous one was blunt and uneven.
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, when it came 800 thousand
years
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 ago, the edge of
this
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tool
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 was much sharper. Some obvious changes can be witnessed from the
rear view
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 and the front view, as the
tool
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 was made with smoother surfaces.
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, the stone used for cutting 1.4
million
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years
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 ago seemed to be processed simply, with few sharpening traces. It was relatively thick and rough, compared with the one produced 800 thousand
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 ago. After more than 1.3
million
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years
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, the stony
tool
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 appeared thinner when viewed from its side.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, years, tool with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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