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Some people say it is more important to plant trees in the open spaces in towns and cities than to build more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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the city has
industrial
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 hub so
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a lot
alot
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a lot
 of people migrate from their place to
city
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the city
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 .there
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a lot
alot
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lot
 of people need
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a house
ahouse
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a house
 so
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tremendous
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a termendous
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termendous
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tremendous
 amount of
building
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buildings
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 are being constructed by builders but it leads to
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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 life.trees are
cutoff
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cut off
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 and
building
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buildings
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 are constructed caused
green
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a green
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 revolution the industries are being constructed
on
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in
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capital
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the capital
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 of the
state
.it leads
a
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lot
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oflot
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 migration toward the capital for
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employment
employement
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employment
.so
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tremendous
tredmentous
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a tredmentous
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 amount of
house
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houses
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 are being constructed
on
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in
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state
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the state
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 capital so government should consider two
state
 plans ,it might help to reduce one
state
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 population
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, for example,
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for example
chennai
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Chennai
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 is considered as it
hub
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a hub
the hub
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 the
state
 commission planned two capital
system
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systems
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,
it
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which
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 may help to
reduces
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reduce
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 industries
on
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 the one city
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