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Some people think that sports played in teams are better than individual sports. Others don’t think so. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In recent years, the issue of
sports
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 has been brought to the public attention. Some
people
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 put forward the idea that
sports
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 played in teams are better than individual
sports
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.
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, those
people
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 who are opposed to it hold the view that individual
sports
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 are better. Taking both sides of the argument into consideration, I am of the opinion that
sports
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 played in teams are better. My arguments for
this
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 point are listed in the following. The first and most important factor is that
team
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sports
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 can help us build up good
teamwork
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while
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 individual
sports
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 cannot. In fact, a lot of
sports
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 like football, basketball and volleyball, require a certain amount of skill of cooperation.
People
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 who are involved in
team
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sports
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 would have a chance to learn how to work with each other. Taking basketball as an example, there are five players in the ball
game
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. Each player has a different mission, one for shooting the ball
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 another
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 to lead the whole
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 in getting the scores.
In contrast
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, individual
sports
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 cannot give a chance on developing
teamwork
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 skills. They always
solo
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 the whole
game
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 and would not know what
time
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 to become the leader and what
time
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 to become support the
team
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. Taking all the above factors into consideration,
it is clear that
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team
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sports
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 can help us build up good
teamwork
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. Another factor is that the atmosphere of
team
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sports
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 is better than individual
sports
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. Many
people
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 claim that if there is a
team
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sports
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game
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, it needs
time
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 to find a teammate to join the
game
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. It seems that having enough
people
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 is more difficult and more
time
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-consuming than individual
sports
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. Even a football
game
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 requires 22
people
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 to start.
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, it is not the case. The process of setting up the
team
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 sport
game
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 is harder than a
solo
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game
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 but after we overcome that, the things we learnt and the precious memory and experience obtained from the
team
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 sport
game
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 are much more valuable and meaningful than individual
sports
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. There is a good feeling of seeing everybody play different roles in a
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.
Besides
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, a
solo
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game
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,
such
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 as tennis, needs to find an opponent to start the
game
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 and it needs
time
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. Taking all the above factors into consideration,
it is clear that
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team
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sports
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 are better than individual
sports
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. In conclusion, I hold an unshakable view that
sports
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 played in teams are better than individual
sports
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.
Team
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sports
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 can help us build up good
teamwork
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 and atmosphere. The advantages of joining
team
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sports
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 are more than that of
solo
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sports
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. It is high
time
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 that we experienced
team
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sports
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.
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