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It has been suggested that primary children should learn how to grow vegetables and keep animals. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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When it comes to pupils these days, people hold conflicting views on whether they should learn how to grow vegetables and keep
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. In my opinion,
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 I understand that growing vegetables and keeping
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 may have some drawbacks, I strongly believe that its benefits are greater.
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 with, there are a variety of disadvantages to growing vegetables and keeping
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 for pupils. It is important to acknowledge that they don’t know how to take care of
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plants
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. The main reason is that they are only between 7 and 11 years old, they don’t pay attention to themselves, let alone
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 and
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. Indeed, they still need help from their parents and cannot be able to help the
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 and
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 grow well.
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, their parents can provide support for them, which means they can understand how to use fertilizers for trees to grow and feed
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 to grow up fast.
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, when considering the positive effect, the mentioned drawbacks become relatively insignificant. Regarding the former, they can learn to care for people by taking care of
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 and
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. When they use water or fertilizers for trees or feed
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 which means it is similar to looking after people around them, especially their parents who can become ill anytime. As for the latter, they can learn about biodiversity
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 the ecosystem, which is beneficial for their future study.
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, they know how
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 grow up and behave with each other, which helps them to easily study biology.
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, I would argue that the benefits of growing
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 and keeping
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 when they are primary students outweigh the drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • primary children
  • grow vegetables
  • keep animals
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • practical skills development
  • environmental awareness
  • health benefits
  • instilling responsibility
  • learning about food production
  • time commitment
  • maintenance costs
  • safety concerns
  • curriculum constraints
  • limited resources
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