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According to some people, organizing things and keeping them in their right place both at home and in office is important. I agree with this opinion to a certain extent, but I also feel that there is no need to keep something that is used often in the correct place.

#people #right #place #home #office
The diagram provides the information of gender whose
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11-14 and engaged in extreme
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 in the UK in 2003. In general, the total
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extreme
sport
average
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 were over 10
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 except
snowboarding
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 only 6.1
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. From the data supplied the highest total
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average at 26.6
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were
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 rollerblading.
Moreover
, it was the highest extreme
sport
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female
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 participated about 31.7
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 much greater than others, and it was
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sport
 which
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 of female more than
male
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 part in skateboarding was the highest around 27.5
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 which
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 twice
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female
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 to other extreme
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participated
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 in mountain climbing were similar for each 10.6 and 9.3
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participation
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 of female in snowboarding
were
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 4.0
by comparison
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 much greater one-fold than female.
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, both digitals were under 10
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.
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, the amount of mountain biking
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 male and female were 22.7 and 13.3
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 respectively.
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