Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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two groups.

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group argue that new

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have brought people together.

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, another group claims that because of modern

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we are becoming isolated from society. From my perspective, I agree with these two groups. So, in

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issues. On the one hand,

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gives us huge possibilities.

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, thanks to

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web we can get to know each other even if we live in different countries or continents.

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in touch with each.

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resort. After the end of our

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we exchanged nicknames on Instagram.

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these days.

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, all media help us to be aware of everything

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is right now happening in the world.

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time when we need it.

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line in TikTok or Instagram

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society.

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able to become isolated. I mean that they can spend a lot of time

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different media apps or just play

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computer games.

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, these persons will lose interest in the world and disconnect from reality.

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into addiction.

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, people can become less confident.

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, they will have communication problems with typical human beings everywhere. By way of conclusion, modern technologies have a lot of advantages and many disadvantages.

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all people should find a compromise and balance and use new technologies only

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a beneficial way.

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connectivity
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social media
virtual meetings
global community
isolation
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face-to-face interaction
personal connections
dependency
technology addiction
digital divide

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