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Some students take a year off between school and University to work or travel. Do the advantage s of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Young people like to have a gap term between high
school
 and University for several purposes
such
 as relaxation,
however
, it can make them feel ideal to complete their degree. I believe the benefits more than the drawbacks.
This
 essay will analyse both the advantages and the disadvantages of having
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free time without studying. In the vast majority of ,cases students like to have free years after high
school
 for many different reasons.
For example
, to work in places like restaurants or cafes,
consequently
, they can have a great amount of money that can assist them to pay for their University because most of the superior courses need the students to pay.
Moreover
, young people mostly feel that they do not have the motivation to study more because they drained their energy
furthermore
, a year off can help them to get their energy back.
For example
, my sister studied hard in her
last
 period of high
school
 so she decided to have a long holiday after that she completed her degree enthusiastically.
On the other hand
, having a long holiday can affect negatively enlistment.
Firstly
, some students will forget their passion and their dream job because they feel comfortable without studying and,
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 stage, many adults have done the same thing and it ended with the spread of unemployment in some countries. In conclusion. I am convinced that having a stage off will affect admission in positive ways more than negative,
however
, some admission prefers going to the University immediately after high
school
.
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