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You are moving to a new country to go to university and will need a part - time job . You have a friend who lives in that country . Write a letter to your friend . In your letter , apologise for not staying in touch explain why you're moving to this country ask your friend if he / she can help you find a job .

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Dear Dolly
Although
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 we shared a good friendship in school we weren't in touch for long.
Firstly
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, I apologize for not staying in contact with you after school.
Nevertheless
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, better late than never now life has given us an opportunity to spend plenty of time together and make more memories as I'
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 moving to Canada next month.
Secondly
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, Do you remember that during our 12th ,class I spilled-up my beans about the dream of studying abroad?
Also
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, my parents were not ready to send me to another country as they had their own good reasons. Though it took a long period of 6 months to convince them. After long and long discussions and ,effort I got an appointment with a knowledgeable education advisor who told me and my family the pros and cons of pursuing studies in developed nations like Canada.
Consequently
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, my loved ones agreed to send me to Canada. And to add on, the amazing part is that when they came to know about you staying there it was a relief for them for my flight to a stranger nation.
Finally
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 all set to meet you on your birthday bash and have a double celebration on these two occasions - my arrival and your turning 19. I'
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 facing a small problem because I don't know the Job system there. If you can do me a favour and find one, it would be a great help. I'
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 waiting to hear from you. Best regards, Geetika

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph fully develops a single idea to enhance clarity.
task achievement
Maintain the friendly and engaging tone that you have used throughout.
coherence cohesion
The letter includes a clear greeting and closing, making it well-structured.
task achievement
The tone is friendly and suitable for writing to a friend, effectively achieving the task's purpose.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Apologize for not staying in touch: 'I feel terrible about not being in contact more often...', 'I'm sorry for not keeping in touch as much as I'd like to...'.
  • Moving: 'I'm thrilled to be moving to...', 'I've been given an amazing opportunity to study at...', 'I am on the brink of starting a new chapter in...'.
  • Part-time job: 'I am hoping to find a part-time job...', 'It would be great if you could help me with finding...', 'I am eager to work and gain some experience...'.
  • Study and university: 'I will be joining...', 'I have enrolled in...', 'My course will be...'.
  • Requesting assistance: 'Do you think you could help me out with...', 'Would you mind giving me some guidance about...', 'Could you keep an eye out for...'.
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