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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).
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The data represents the millions of people who
traveled
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 internationally in the years 1990, 1995, 2000, and 2005.
Travelers
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 to Europe comprise more than half of the total
number
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. It started with 280.2
million
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 in 1990 and almost doubled the
number
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 after 15 years. America came second from 80.5
million
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 in 1990,
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, the
number
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 dropped significantly to about 5
million
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 in 2005.
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, it was a remarkably good standing for Asia and the Pacific because the
number
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 of people who
traveled
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 there increased every 5 years from 60.2
million
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 in 1990 to 135.8
million
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 in 2005. It was almost the same scenario with Africa and the Middle East because the surge of tourists continuously increases as well.
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, Europe has got the highest
number
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 of
travelers
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 since 1990,
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 the Middle East
travelers
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 were the lowest.
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, there has been a constant increase in tourists
traveling
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 to these major continents in the world.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant increase
  • international travel
  • popular destinations
  • economic growth
  • technological advancements
  • ease of travel
  • cultural exchange
  • globalization
  • fluctuations
  • trend
  • millions of travelers
  • annual growth rate
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