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In many parts of the world today there is a profitable market for products which lighten or whiten people’s skin. Outline the reasons for using such products and discuss what effects they have in terms of health and society.

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Cosmetics
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 industry has gained a huge
rise
 in the market and it has become a profitable business in the world today. These days, beauty standards for
people
 have changed and fair and white
skin
 complexion has gained importance. In
this
 essay, several reasons behind the
rise
 in the market of these
products
 and their
affects
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effects
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 will be discussed. First of all, the main cause behind the
rise
 in the business of whitening
products
 is that everyone wants to look beautiful and perfect as fair
skin
 tone has become a beauty standard and everyone wants to look like that.
For instance
,
people
 living in Korea and Japan have
a
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very fair and smooth
skin
 and through
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the internet
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internet
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 everyone now has access to see what's trending around the globe. Today, glass
skin
 has become a trend that ultimately results in
the
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an
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 increase in demand
of
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for
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 these kinds of
products
.
Secondly
, discussing
about
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the impacts of
such
products
regarding
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on
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 health and society
are
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is
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 that these
products
contains
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contain
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 several harmful chemicals that
leaves
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leave
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a
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an
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imediate
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immediate
 whitening effect on
skin
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the skin
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. In
a
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the
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 long run, the chemicals present in these
products
such
 as mercury, ammonia and several steroids
results
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result
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 in
skin
 cancer and other
skin
 issues like
eczima
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eczema
,
skin
 burn etc. In terms of society, it causes a barrier among
people
 of different countries
and
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apply
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they gaze
people
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at people
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 with dark
skin
tone
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tones
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 as criminals and they don't find them
attracting
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.
At
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In
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 the end, these were the few reasons for a
hug
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huge
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rise
 in the business of
skin
-whitening
products
 that has become a global issue as they
results
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result
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 in several health problems. We can overcome
this
 by guiding
people
 about the
ingrediants
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ingredients
 used in these
products
 and their
hazardeous
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hazardous
affects
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effects
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. By starting social media campaigns and changing our beauty standards, we can mitigate the use of
such
products
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Skin lightening
  • Whitening products
  • Cultural standards
  • Beauty ideals
  • Media portrayal
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Colorism
  • Self-esteem
  • Toxic ingredients
  • Hydroquinone
  • Mercury
  • Melanin
  • Dermatological health
  • Consumer awareness
  • Regulatory bodies
  • Ethical marketing
  • Natural remedies
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