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In your opinion, do you think that all children should be taught in a school environment? Say why you think home-schooling would not be a good idea and also point out some benefits for this chosen form of education.

In
this
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 era of technology, schools are known as an important
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 for children to improve their skills and knowledge. In my personal point of view, children are more organised in
school
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 environment rather than at home.
This
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 essay will discuss the drawbacks and advantages of home-schooling. First and foremost, the
disadvantages
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 of online learning
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 that teachers have less control
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student's
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 homework and behaviour. With online learning, there is
also
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 a greater chance for
students
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 to be easily distracted by social media .
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,
a
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research has shown that most
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students
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 attending virtual classes are not fully
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 on the topics discussed by their tutors.
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,
this
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from
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form
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 of education is likely to reduce
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decipline
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discipline
as well as
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 their behaviour.
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, there are some benefits of online education. One of the pros is that it allows
students
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 to attend classes from any location and
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cost
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. Since
students
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 have limited access to virtual learning, they don't have to spend their money on
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such
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 as
bus
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,
taxi
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 and more.
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, the majority of pupils during
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 period
able
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 to attend classes without having to face traffic
jam
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 in the early morning. In the nutshell, home-learning would be a good idea
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 some
extend
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.
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, school plays an important role more than just education institution as
it
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they
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 promote a better learning environment
on
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 postgraduate in the future.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social development
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Curriculum
  • Pedagogy
  • Diversity
  • Structured learning
  • Professional educators
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Real-world challenges
  • Cultural exposure
  • Societal norms
  • Homeschooling
  • Peer relationships
  • Skill acquisition
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