In your opinion, do you think that all children should be taught in a school environment? Say why you think home-schooling would not be a good idea and also point out some benefits for this chosen form of education.

In
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for children to improve their skills and knowledge. In my personal point of view, children are more organised in
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environment rather than at home.
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essay will discuss the drawbacks and advantages of home-schooling. First and foremost, the
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of online learning
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that teachers have less control
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homework and behaviour. With online learning, there is
also
a greater chance for
students
to be easily distracted by social media .
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research has shown that most
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students
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attending virtual classes are not fully
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on the topics discussed by their tutors.
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of education is likely to reduce
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discipline
as well as
their behaviour.
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, there are some benefits of online education. One of the pros is that it allows
students
to attend classes from any location and
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cost
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. Since
students
have limited access to virtual learning, they don't have to spend their money on
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such
as
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,
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and more.
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, the majority of pupils during
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period
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to attend classes without having to face traffic
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in the early morning. In the nutshell, home-learning would be a good idea
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some
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.
However
, school plays an important role more than just education institution as
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promote a better learning environment
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postgraduate in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social development
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Curriculum
  • Pedagogy
  • Diversity
  • Structured learning
  • Professional educators
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Real-world challenges
  • Cultural exposure
  • Societal norms
  • Homeschooling
  • Peer relationships
  • Skill acquisition
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