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Wild animal have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Different
countries
'
consumer
 spendings are quite different. The table shows the
vary
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consumer
 spending on a series of items in the five
countries
, namely,
the
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Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey in 2002. Food, drinks, and tobacco were in the most important position on
consumer
 spending in all of the fire
countries
, and in a different percentage. In Ireland and turkey. they were nearly 30%,
while
 in the other three
countries
, they are under 20%. Clothing and footwear were the second most important
consumer
 spending in these
countries
. In Italy, they got 9%, and in Sweden, they were 5.4%. In the other three
countries
, the figure
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very similar, all were near 6.5%. The
last
consumer
 spendings
were
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was leisure and education. In Turkey, they were 4.35%, and in the other four
countries
, the figure
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was under 4%. In conclusion, it can be said that in 2002, food, drinks, and
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tobacco
tobacoo
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tobacco
 were the most important
consumer
 spending in the five
countries
, and the different
countries
'
consumer
 spending
were
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was quite different
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