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some people think that to be successful , you need to get in a university degree. where as others say it is not true. discuss both ideas and give your opinion ?

#people #university
In
this
 contemporary era, getting a university degree is
on
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 of
most
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 important
part
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 of everyone's life. There are some
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 that being successful is depend on your educational degree.
However
, others advocate that
succeeding
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 process is not
depend
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 on
academical
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 learning. In
this
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 I will discuss both views and opine that why academic education is an important point in
this
 case. In some public thinking, University
educating
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education
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 is a kind of preparation for expertise
works
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work
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. In
the
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colleges and universities,
students
 learn a lot of knowledge about what they want to be in future.
For example
,
engineering
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if engineering
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students
 pass more than a hundred units in their field and it can make them
expert
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experts
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 in their major.
Moreover
, they can know about
newest
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 details in their field. Professors in faculties, in order to make
students
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students'
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 information fresh, try to give some
homeworks
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homework
them
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,
for instance
, some
works
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 like studying new articles. It makes
students
 up-to-date about their majors.
Therefore
, they have a lot of fresh
scentific
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scientific
 knowledge in their degree. On the other side, some people say that university is not important for
successfulness
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success
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. they believe that it is enough to have
capability
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the capability
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 or
efforts
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effort
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 for being a successful person. It is true that capability and effort is two necessary
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 to succeed,
This
 group claim that if you be ingenious and interested in your interests you can learn easily everything that you want, as a case of
this
 point, you can study books by yourself and contribute in some courses,but in fact
in my opinion
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 it is not enough and you will waste a lot of time or money,
therefore
 your achievements are not adequate. In conclusion, there are two different views about
usefulness
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the usefulness
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 of academic education in
successfulness
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, I believe
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • admission policies
  • merit-based admissions
  • diverse student body
  • socio-economic background
  • inclusivity
  • academic standards
  • equal opportunities
  • quota system
  • cultural exchange
  • globalization of education
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