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The graph shows the information about international conferences in three capital cities in 1980 – 2010

The graph shows the information about international conferences in three capital cities in 1980 – 2010
This
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 line graph illustrates the data
of
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 international
conferences
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 between 1980 and 2010 in three
cities
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the number of
conferences
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 in
City
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C
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 increased until 2000,
while
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 those in
Cities
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 A and
B
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 fluctuated during
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 period.
According to
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 what is shown, from 1980 to 1985, there was a significant decrease for both
cities
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 A and
B
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 of around 29 and 21, respectively, in originating
conferences
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,
whereas
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 in
city
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C
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, it rose quickly by 20.
In addition
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, in 2005,
cities
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 A and
B
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 held an equal number of
conferences
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,
that is
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 around 27.
However
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, they organized the
conferences
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 in
city
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C
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, which saw a huge increase between 1990 and 2000, by exactly 25 and 35, respectively. In 2005, there was a gradual decline in
city
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C
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 of more than 30.
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, the number of
conferences
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 was moderately reduced by just over 30.
To sum up
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, we could say that
city
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C
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 was
more
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preferred
than
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cities
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 A and
B
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 for the management of
conferences
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 over the past 30 years.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words conferences, cities, city, c, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international conferences
  • capital cities
  • trend
  • fluctuates
  • dominates
  • peak
  • trough
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • periods
  • data representation
  • interpretation
  • measure
  • y-axis
  • x-axis
  • comparative analysis
  • statistical figures
  • conclusion
  • summary
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