Many schools these days have problems with poor student behaviour.Why do you think these problems occur?What could be done to tackle this problems?

Nowadays Many schools have problems with student misbehaviour.
This
is is
problem
harmful to other
children
of the school.In
this
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I will look at the reasons for
this
and propose some solutions. One of the main causes of the
problem
is the upbringing given by his
parents
.Most of their
time
is spent at work and they can not spare
time
for
children
to end up with bad
behaviour
.,
Secondly
problem
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is their teacher's lack of education,it reduces the child's knowledge and leads to their immorality.The
problem
solution is
parents
should take their
time
and pay attention to
children
's
behaviour
for at least 5 hours in the day.
For example
,they have to work until 3pm and the rest of the
time
they have to deal with the child's
behaviour
if
parents
behave in
this
way,the upbringing of
children
will be improved and they will be protected from bad
behaviour
.
To sum up
, the main reason for
this
problem
is that
parents
do not have
time
for their
children
.Some people including me opinion it is a really nice opinion.Their teachers
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lack
of
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knowledge.
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