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Some people believe that it is best to accept bad situation. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

#people #situation #situations
Nowadays,  
life
 changes year after year, so
people
 have different situations in their lives. Some believe that it is preferable to have a poor
position
,
while
 others believe that it is preferable to try to develop a
position
.I strongly believe that  
people
 should  improve and develop themselves.
To begin
 with, many
people
 think that it should be accepted as
bad
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a bad
the bad
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 form that they are illiterate or have not completed their education.
Moreover
, the scarcity of jobs may affect your ability to find a suitable job with a higher salary.
For example
,  Jeddah, the
city
, has a huge population, which may affect the availability of jobs  because it is a small town.
Also
,  business companies are always attracted to the capital
city
 because of its perfect location to increase their incomes.
On the other hand
, there are some
people
 who suppose that to take a better
position
, they should improve themselves. Because the best way to have a better
position
 with a high salary in our lives is to develop
themselves
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, To illustrate, a research study was published in the Royal Society of Business. They studied two groups of
people
 who worked in different positions and found that  group A  lived in a modern
city
 and had a high level of education,
while
  group B lived in a small
city
 with a high school education and was unhappy with their
life
. 
To sum up
, after a careful analysis of both points of view , I believe that it is preferable to try and develop your situation because it is very crucial to have a better
life
 in
life
.
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