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Some people believe that it is best to accept bad situation. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

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Nowadays,  
life
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 changes year after year, so
people
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 have different situations in their lives. Some believe that it is preferable to have a poor
position
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,
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 others believe that it is preferable to try to develop a
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.I strongly believe that  
people
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 should  improve and develop themselves.
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 with, many
people
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 think that it should be accepted as
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 form that they are illiterate or have not completed their education.
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, the scarcity of jobs may affect your ability to find a suitable job with a higher salary.
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,  Jeddah, the
city
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, has a huge population, which may affect the availability of jobs  because it is a small town.
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,  business companies are always attracted to the capital
city
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 because of its perfect location to increase their incomes.
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, there are some
people
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 who suppose that to take a better
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, they should improve themselves. Because the best way to have a better
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 with a high salary in our lives is to develop
themselves
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, To illustrate, a research study was published in the Royal Society of Business. They studied two groups of
people
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 who worked in different positions and found that  group A  lived in a modern
city
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 and had a high level of education,
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  group B lived in a small
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 with a high school education and was unhappy with their
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. 
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, after a careful analysis of both points of view , I believe that it is preferable to try and develop your situation because it is very crucial to have a better
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 in
life
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