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The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.
#water #usage #san #diego #california #rest #world
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The pie charts provide information about the proportion of
water
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consumption
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 in
San
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Diego
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,
California
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 and the rest of the world.
Overall
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, the
water
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 rate for residential is mostly in both
San
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Diego
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 and
California
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,
whereas
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 in the world,
water
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 is used for the agricultural sector mainly. When we look at the charts about
San
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Diego
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 and
California
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 in detail, residential has the biggest proportion numbers for both cities, which are 60%for
San
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Diego
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 and 39%for
California
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.
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, industrial
usage
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 is in second place for both places, but
California
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's
consumption
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 of
water
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 rate is more than
San
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Diego
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 that are 33% and 23%, respectively.
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, the agricultural
water
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usage
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 rate is 28% in
California
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, and
San
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Diego
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's
water
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consumption
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 percentage is 17% When we look at the world's
water
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usage
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 percentage in detail,
water
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 for agriculture has an important percentage
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 69%, and industrial
consumption
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 proportion is 23%.
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,
water
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usage
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 for residential is in
last
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 place, which is 8%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, consumption, san, diego, california, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • households
  • significant
  • industrial use
  • implications
  • agriculture
  • geographical
  • climatic
  • economic factors
  • patterns
  • sustainability
  • practices
  • surprising
  • exceptionally
  • improvements
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