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In their advertising business nowadays usually emphasis on that their product are new in some way.

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Nowadays people who have their own advertising businesses mostly emphasise their own products and their new features. They try to promote their product by adding new and attractive features and comparing it with any of The same products from other companies. I believe people do
such
 promotion activities to provide a good profit in their business
also
 they have their own management for advertising so public health becomes secondary. I think it is a positive
as well as
 a negative development because what we see we buy, sometimes even without reviewing the products. So a person who tends to sell his or her article or item will give his best to promote it by providing attractive ads and pamphlets for the same.
For instance
, Once I bought a shampoo after getting influenced just by watching its regular and non-stop ads on tv and in the theatres, that was the biggest mistake of my life I found it really fake and a honey trap with a good and cheap price. I got all my hair damaged and faced many more scalp problems. So these advertisements have more effects on our minds as they are self-made by those who have their own businesses. Making a wise choice is really important
while
 buying things from the market. What do you think about it? Yes of course, these are essential too, as they make us aware of many good things from which we are unfamiliar like people in rural areas must know about the benefits of using sanitary pads and the consequences of using cloth during their menstrual hygiene. I would rather conclude by saying every coin has its 2 faces
similarly
 advertisements have their pros and cons at the same time. But, I would suggest better to have a good knowledge about the item before purchasing it and not merely getting attracted towards it.
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