the table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbishetd. the charts show the result od surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with visit, during the same two period.
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visitors
to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished, Use synonyms
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the pie charts illustrate the result of surveys asking Linking Words
visitors
how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Use synonyms
Overall
, it seems that most of the results of surveys of Linking Words
visitors
represent people are more satisfied after refurbishment rather than before.
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the table number of Linking Words
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the share of Linking Words
visitors
who were dissatisfied and very dissatisfied became less. The before refurbishment pie chart demonstrates that a large part of the chart belonged to dissatisfied and very dissatisfied people with half of the pie. Use synonyms
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visitors
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lower share than opponent groups. It should be considered that after refurbishing positive opinions about the museum get raised 30% more than before implementation, Change the spelling
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while
the number of negative opinions decreased by 30%. There was a group of people who didn’t have any response to the survey and, they remained at 5% after and before the implementation.Linking Words
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