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The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.
#water #usage #san #diego #california #rest #world
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The above pie chart illustrates the percentage of use of
water
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 for residential, industrial, and agricultural purposes in
San
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Diego
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,
California
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, and worldwide.
Overall
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,In
San
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Diego
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, a major portion of
water
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 is consumed for residential purposes
while
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 agricultural usage is the biggest contributor to
water
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 consumption all over the world.Industrial usage is the same in both
San
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Diego
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as well as
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 worldwide. The residential use of
water
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 is much more in
San
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Diego
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 about 60% as compared to less utilization in
California
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 and the rest of the world about 39% and 8% respectively. The industries consume
water
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 more in
California
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 about 33% which is 10% more excessive than used in
San
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Diego
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 and worldwide about 23 %. Agricultural use of
water
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 covers the majority of consumption about 69% in the world and 17% and 28 % in
San
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Diego
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 and
California
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 respectively.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, san, diego, california with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • households
  • significant
  • industrial use
  • implications
  • agriculture
  • geographical
  • climatic
  • economic factors
  • patterns
  • sustainability
  • practices
  • surprising
  • exceptionally
  • improvements
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