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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Many
people
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 across the globe argue that accepting harsh realities,
for example
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, undesirable jobs or
shortage
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 of money, is the best way to go ahead in life. Still, others claim that these conditions are part and parcel of life and can be improved. I strongly agree with the latter perspective. In some cases,
people
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 succumb to affliction and insist that bad
situations
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 should be accepted, be it an unsatisfactory profession or lack of money. These
people
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 lack the courage to
change
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 their life. They believe that good or bad
situations
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 occur as part of their fate.
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, a
person
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 doesn’t like his job yet does not want to quit as he’s afraid of the unpredictable future.
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, he accepts the situation without making an effort to ameliorate it. As a matter of fact, there are some bad
situations
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 which are way beyond our control,
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 as a serious illness which eventually leads to death. In
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 cases, we need to cope with the loss rather than brooding over it.
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, a few
people
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 claim that certain
situations
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 can be refined if we make an attempt. A
person
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 can assess their current situation and
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 it
as per
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at
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 their convenience. Suppose a
person
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 is unhappy with his current profession. In that case, he must look out for opportunities that will allow him to be happy and help him grow monetarily.
Apart from
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this
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, the
person
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 can
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 learn new skills, build his resume, and get his desirable job.
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, if a
person
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 is determined to
change
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 his lifestyle, he can definitely improve bad
situations
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. In conclusion, there are
people
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 who have baseless excuses to live in a state of a bad situation. But I believe that there’s always a better way to improve our negative circumstances and
change
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 our paths in order to have a good future.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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