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MANY PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT MODERN MUSIC CAN HAVE A NEGETIVE IMPACT ON THE YOUNG. OTHERS BELIEVE THE EFFECT OF MODERN MUSIC IS POSITIVE. DISCUSS BOTH THE VEIWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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These days, more and more
people
 are listening to different types of
music
 and that make a good effect on them.
However
, others believe that the new
music
 is affecting in a bad way to the
teenagers
.
This
 essay agrees that
teenagers
 can be affected gloomily. There are a lot of
teenagers
 who are listening to different types of
music
 in which they feel that the lyrics are related to what they feel or what they had.
In particular
, in rap there, a lot of
people
 are doing that type of
music
 to express their feelings.
This
 essay agrees that
teenagers
 are being affected negatively. As an example, the rappers are showing one part of the story and singing it which could affect the younger.
However
, many agree and feel that recent
music
 can have a useful effect on the younger generation by helping them to focus and relax. Specifically,
People
 are working
while
 they are listening to
music
 to concentrate more.
For instance
, the students are being affected by the culture that everyone is listening to
music
, and that makes them want to explore modern
music
. In conclusion,
people
 see that modern
music
 can be a good thing for
this
 generation to listen to, particularly to help them relax and express what they feel
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 others believe that current
music
 types are harming
teenagers
 in a different way.
However
, we need to be careful
to
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 what we are listing because not everything is true and that should not affect us.
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