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Working from home is becoming increasingly popular. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Nowadays, a lot of people
work
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home
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. It is becoming more popular day by day.
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 what are the benefits of
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 situation, and what are
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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 In
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 essay, I will look at both sides and make an effort to draw some conclusions. Let's commence by looking at the first advantage. It is
time
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, if
one
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person
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 is working from
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, that
person
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 saves her
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, going to
work
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 and come a
home
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, these situations need a lot of
time
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. If
this
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person
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works
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 from
home
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,
this
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person
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 saves her
time
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In addition
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, another benefit is working from
home
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easier
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 than working office.
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, for ,example if
one
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 individual
works
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home
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,
and
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apply
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this
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 human can a lot of
convince
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 for
work
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. If
this
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person
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work
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works
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 in a company,
this
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 company has or has not convinced, it depends on
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the owners
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owners
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However
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 coin has another side. Turning to the other side of the argument, working from
home
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 lead to a sedentary lifestyle.
According to
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 those who
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works
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 from
home
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, their obesity percentage has dramatically risen. For ,example If
one
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person
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 has overweight, he never
works
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 with a happy character. The second
one
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 is almost never meeting her familiar
person
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.
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, for ,instance if
one
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 human wort from
home
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 and always
works
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 from morning to evening. According
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the can not meet her friend or parents.
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, in my view
work
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 an office is better than
home
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,
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 because working from
home
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 lead to a sedentary lifestyle and obesity.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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