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Formal examinations are the only effective way to assess a student’s performance. Continual assessment such as coursework and projects is not satisfactory way to do this. Do you agree or disagree?

#examinations #student’s #performance #coursework #projects
I strongly agree with the idea, that formal examinations are the only effective method to assess a
student
's
performance
,
while
continual
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assessment
such
 as coursework and projects is not
satisfactory
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a satisfactory
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 way to do
this
. Nowadays students are assessed by assignments and several schoolwork, but I don'
t
 think
this
 is the right way to assess someone. Specifically for
student's
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students
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 who don'
t
 take exams as
a
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serious
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seriously
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 thing. Everything will be discussed in
this
 essay. On the one hand,
student's
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students'
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 education level will be assessed perfectly because of the existence of formal
examination
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examinations
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.
In addition
, exams include the most important
informations
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information
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 that the
student
need
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needs
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 to concentrate on
also
, without
examining
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examination
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student's
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students
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 won'
t
 take it
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seriously
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serious
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seriously
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.
For example
: if teachers decided to let us work
in
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on
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 projects and coursework, I
wont
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won't
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 be learning about the whole material and end up not knowing the main ideas.
On the other hand
, continual
assessment
 seem to be easier
some how
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somehow
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 for some
student's
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students
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,
which
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so
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 they don'
t
 have to spend a lot of time studying and memorizing things.
Such
 as some
student's
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students
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 are stressed because of these formal examinations so they end up not getting assessed properly. So continual
assessment
 may be the second better option for them to check their
performance
. In conclusion, people have a different
opinion
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opinions
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 about checking on
performance
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the performance
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 of the
student
, whether to be assessed by formal examinations or by continual
assessment
.
This
 comes back to the
student
's point of view and what
does
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he or she prefer more, to get excellent
performance
.
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