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Over population in many major urban centers around the world is a major problem. What are the causes of this? How can this problem be solved?

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The growing
population
 in urban
areas
 has become a matter of concern these days. There are a plethora of reasons for
this
 phenomenon.
This
 essay will highlight the reasons
along with
 the possible solutions in the forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with, many
people
 migrate from the countryside to developed
cities
 for numerous reasons.
Firstly
, lack of infrastructure, and job opportunities.
Secondly
, inadequate education systems
such
 as few schools, colleges, and professional institutes.
Additionally
, living in the countryside does not provide an access to the amenities that a developed country can.
For instance
, a recent study depicted that the
population
 in Hyderabad has almost doubled in the
last
 five years.
People
 relocated from rural
areas
 to urban
areas
 to earn a better livelihood.
Furthermore
, the young generation leaves their houses for higher studies and job opportunities which are not available in rural
areas
due to
 the lack of technology, and education system. In small villages, the only source of income for an individual is farming. To prevent the growing
population
 in metropolitan
cities
, the government must take some preventive measures to develop rural
areas
. Authorities not only focus on the prime
cities
 to develop but
also
 rural
areas
 should be taken into the account. It will eventually help
people
 to get jobs in their native place and they do not have to migrate to the developed city.
To conclude
, providing facilities to the
people
 in rural
areas
 can help to overcome the growing
population
 in urban
areas
.
Also
, it will help to control the growing
population
 in the major
cities
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overpopulation
  • urban centers
  • rural areas
  • job opportunities
  • education facilities
  • healthcare facilities
  • family planning
  • birth rates
  • infrastructure management
  • sustainable development
  • population control measures
  • urban planning
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