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It is important for people to take risks, both in theirprofessional lives and personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risksoutweigh the disadvantages?

#people #risks #lives #risksoutweigh
Nowadays, many people usually change some aspect of their life
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in terms
 of job and individual sphere. Certainly, a life-changing of
this
 type could have benefits and
drawback
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life
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of
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a
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person. In my view, when the latter
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 more than
former
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 it depends strictly
from
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 the context.
To begin
, for
worker
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 it
si
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 clear that some new experience in their job or more
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 something in their work
live
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 make them more
motivate
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. In fact, all the
most rich
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 and
productive
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company
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companies
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of
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 the
word
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world
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 have already
utilisized
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utilized
utilised
this
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tecquiniques
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techniques
 to improve the happiness of our employers and to encourage them to remain in their
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workshop
.
Moreover
, individual change
also
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 a
rilevant
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relevant
 way to stimulate a positive evolution.
For instance
, many famous sporters usually find new motivation in order to obtain new winning in their championship,
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 experimenting new activities in their routine from
the
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obtaining a
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degree
desire
 to
learn
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 new culinary recipes.
On the other hand
, the biggest drawback of
this
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 changes would be the stress.
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occassions
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occasions
, a sense of stress is a formidable
compaign
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campaign
 of the person who
make
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 a
choiche
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choice
.
As a consequence
, the life quality of
this
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 people would decrease sharply and in the worst situation
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they would
fell
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feel
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in
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a huge sense of sadness and depression.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Success
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Confidence
  • Resilience
  • Experiences
  • Lessons
  • Self-discovery
  • Fear
  • Comfort zones
  • Decision-making
  • Adventures
  • Failure
  • Setbacks
  • Instability
  • Stress
  • Anxiety
  • Relationships
  • Balancing
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