The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map shows there is an industrial
area
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that will be changed in the
town
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of Nobiton and will be executed of the site in the few next years. In general, it appears that the planned future development has become a much more modern
area
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and had many
facilities
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, which new shops, a medical centre, a school, and a playground. One interesting change is that new all factory buildings will be removed, to build houses and
facilities
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.
However
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,
this
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year, there is no accommodation for people.
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Furthermore
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all housing will be built in the
area
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.
In addition
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, another striking change is that
facilities
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such
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as shops and medical centres will be constructed in the middle of the
area
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to be convenient for residents.
Next,
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a completely new playground and school will be set up on the other side of the
town
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.
To conclude
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, If we look at the street in the
town
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area
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, it will be exceeded more to housing and
facilities
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in the future, and a bridge will be built to connect another side river a resident building. The north of the
town
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has no construction but a building will be built and a street will be accessed by the whole building. A final interesting development will be a new roundabout in the south of the
town
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area, town, facilities with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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