The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map shows there is an industrial
area
that will be changed in the
town
of Nobiton and will be executed of the site in the few next years. In general, it appears that the planned future development has become a much more modern
area
and had many
facilities
, which new shops, a medical centre, a school, and a playground. One interesting change is that new all factory buildings will be removed, to build houses and
facilities
.
However
,
this
year, there is no accommodation for people.
Furthermore
Add a comma
,Furthermore
show examples
all housing will be built in the
area
.
In addition
, another striking change is that
facilities
such
as shops and medical centres will be constructed in the middle of the
area
to be convenient for residents.
Next,
a completely new playground and school will be set up on the other side of the
town
.
To conclude
, If we look at the street in the
town
area
, it will be exceeded more to housing and
facilities
in the future, and a bridge will be built to connect another side river a resident building. The north of the
town
has no construction but a building will be built and a street will be accessed by the whole building. A final interesting development will be a new roundabout in the south of the
town
.
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